Some people say that music is a good way to bringing people different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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an
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the
music
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is
in
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of
music
instrumental, I do believe that musician is using Use synonyms
those good way
to deliver their own culture and ages for connecting Change the determiner
that good way
those good ways
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people
overseas.
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with people
reason
why Change to a plural noun
reasons
people
could Use synonyms
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possibly
possible
have Replace the word
possibly
same
feeling when Change the article
the same
enjoy
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enjoying
music
. Use synonyms
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, every level of Linking Words
people
in countries Use synonyms
transfer
their culture among the society. They create Change the verb form
transfers
music
that can break down their history. And Use synonyms
people
hereafter can Use synonyms
understans
their Correct your spelling
understand
understands
begining
. They, Correct your spelling
beginning
firstly
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for
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and
for
their Change preposition
to
people
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it self
.
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itself
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people
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easly
the Correct your spelling
easily
music
. Especially, the melody which Use synonyms
fulfill
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fulfills
maintenance
their daily mood to boost doing something. Replace the word
maintain
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Musician
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The musician
maintenance
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maintain
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the audience
audience
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audience's
arrange
the melody. To illustrate, they Change the verb form
arranging
also
write down the lyric for Linking Words
people
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understanding
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to understand
it
better.
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them
last
but not least, Linking Words
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first
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the first
overseas
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an overseas
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audience
tried to Fix the agreement mistake
audiences
understan
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understand
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the reason why Linking Words
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the musician
musician
who represented the Fix the agreement mistake
musicians
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audience
appearance Change noun form
audience's
become
easy to remember. Change the verb form
becomes
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perform
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performance
express
the song, Change the verb form
expressing
people
tend to feel it emotionally. That Use synonyms
music
performance can steal Use synonyms
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the audience
audience
heart and gain attention.
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audience's
music
can translate human Use synonyms
feeling
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feelings
easly
. These terms are Correct your spelling
easily
possibly
for them to sing together Replace the word
possible
throughtout
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throughout
song
. And could connect their feeling Correct article usage
the song
each
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to each
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