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Examine the arguments in favour and against animal experiments, and come to a conclusion on this issue. You should use your own ideas, knowledge, and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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The ability to experiment on live
animals
 has become a huge asset to science, especially in fields that regard medicine and biology. It is
also
 known that in those particular fields, many experiments are not conducted safely for the
animals
. I will analyze some major points both in favour and against those methods in order to conclude whether they are legitimate in the context of ethics and necessary development. Regarding the ethics factor, some experiments cause severe
side-effects
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 to the
animals
, both mentally and physically. Multiple cosmetic brands,
for instance
, have been exposed for testing their products on monkeys and rabbits in very inhuman ways, causing them pain, agony and permanent damages
such
 as blindness. In some cases, the experiments can even be fatal.
Animals
 are, of course, living creatures,
therefore
such
 acts of cruelty should not be acceptable, especially for purposes that are not absolutely vital for
human kind
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humankind
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.
On the other hand
, there are cases where testing is mandatory to ensure that some products are safe to use before releasing them to the market. In
such
 cases, unfortunately, testing said products
is
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 unavoidable, and scientists have only two options; experimenting either on humans or other living beings. For pharmacy laboratories, it is part of the process to test different versions of new medicine over and over again in order to find out how their formulas connect to potential results and side effects. It would surely be extremely unsafe to use human specimens for the early stages of developing new medicine so using
animals
instead
 is sometimes the only way to go. Overall, I believe that animal testing is not ethically ideal, but it is sometimes the only feasible solution to
covering
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 the need
of
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 scientific experimenting. It should be pointed out that animal suffering should be avoided at all costs, or at least minimized.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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