In theie advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

IN
THIS
DAY AND AGE, MANY COMPANIES USE COMMERCIALS TO TELL
PEOPLE
ABOUT
THIER
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THEIR
NEW ITEMS IN THE MARKET. THERE ARE SEVERAL REASONS WHY THEY WANT TO INFORM
PEOPLE
THAT THEY ARE NEW.
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I THINK THAT THE DOWNSIDES MORE THAN
UPSIDES
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THE UPSIDES
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FIRSTLY
, ONE OF THE REASONS IS THAT AN ADVERT IS AN EASY WAY TO REACH THE CONSUMER. ESPECIALLY THE WORLD OF
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IS NOW EXTENDED AND CAN BE FOUND IN MANY SOCIAL MEDIA
APPLICATION
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IN
WHICH
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MANY
PEOPLE
BROWES
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BROWSE
EVERYDAY
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. ANOTHER REASON, IS THAT THEY WANT TO CONVINCE THE BUYER
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THAT
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HE/SHE IS PAYING FOR SOMETHING NEW.
FOR EXAMPLE
, TECHNOLOGY COMPANIES EVERY YEAR THEY INTRODUCE NEW
SMARTPHONE
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AND THEY CLAIM THAT IT HAS A NEW FEATURE NOT FOUND IN THE PREVIOUS VERSION. DESPITE THE BENEFIT OF FOLLOWING
COMMERCIAL
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COMMERCIALS
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TO KNOW WHAT IS NEW IN THE MARKET, IT CAN COME WITH SOME DRAWBACKS.
FURTHERMORE
, MANY
PEOPLE
ONCE
THEY
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THEY SEE THE ADVERT
THEY
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WILL DEMAND TO BUY IT EVEN IF THEY DO NOT NEED IT.
THIS
IS A WASTE OF MONEY.
ALSO
, INDIVIDUALS STARTED TO BECOME MATERIALISTIC, THEY ONLY WANT TO PURCHASE RECENT PRODUCTS AND DISCARD THE OLD
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. ANOTHER DISADVANTAGE, ONLY RICH
BUSINESS
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BUSINESSES
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CAN PAY FOR COMMERCIALS WHILE SMALL ONES ARE NOT ABLE TO DO THAT.
CONSUMER
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CONSUMERS
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WILL ONLY KNOW ABOUT THE ADVERTISED PRODUCT BUT NOT THE OTHER IN CONCLUSION, MANY COMPANIES USE ADVERTISING TO FIND THEIR WAY TO CONSUMERS. AND PROMOTE THEIR PRODUCTS,
HOWEVER
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SUCH
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MAY DAMAGE
PEOLPE
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PEOPLE
THINKING AND CAN MAKE THEM BLOW THEIR SAVINGS ON ITEMS THEY DO NOT REALLY NEED.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Competition
  • Consumer demand
  • Novelty
  • Innovation
  • Progress
  • Differentiation
  • Attract
  • Generate
  • Interest
  • Positive aspect
  • Negative aspect
  • Emphasize
  • Balancing
  • Quality
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