In theie advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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DAY AND AGE, MANY COMPANIES USE COMMERCIALS TO TELL

PEOPLE

ABOUT

THIER

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THEIR

NEW ITEMS IN THE MARKET. THERE ARE SEVERAL REASONS WHY THEY WANT TO INFORM

PEOPLE

THAT THEY ARE NEW.

ALSO

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I THINK THAT THE DOWNSIDES MORE THAN

UPSIDES

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THE UPSIDES

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FIRSTLY

, ONE OF THE REASONS IS THAT AN ADVERT IS AN EASY WAY TO REACH THE CONSUMER. ESPECIALLY THE WORLD OF

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ADVERTISING

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IS NOW EXTENDED AND CAN BE FOUND IN MANY SOCIAL MEDIA

APPLICATION

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APPLICATIONS

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WHICH

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MANY

PEOPLE

BROWES

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BROWSE

EVERYDAY

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. ANOTHER REASON, IS THAT THEY WANT TO CONVINCE THE BUYER

THE

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THAT

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HE/SHE IS PAYING FOR SOMETHING NEW.

FOR EXAMPLE

, TECHNOLOGY COMPANIES EVERY YEAR THEY INTRODUCE NEW

SMARTPHONE

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SMARTPHONES

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AND THEY CLAIM THAT IT HAS A NEW FEATURE NOT FOUND IN THE PREVIOUS VERSION. DESPITE THE BENEFIT OF FOLLOWING

COMMERCIAL

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COMMERCIALS

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TO KNOW WHAT IS NEW IN THE MARKET, IT CAN COME WITH SOME DRAWBACKS.

FURTHERMORE

, MANY

PEOPLE

ONCE

THEY

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THEY SEE THE ADVERT

THEY

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WILL DEMAND TO BUY IT EVEN IF THEY DO NOT NEED IT.

THIS

IS A WASTE OF MONEY.

ALSO

, INDIVIDUALS STARTED TO BECOME MATERIALISTIC, THEY ONLY WANT TO PURCHASE RECENT PRODUCTS AND DISCARD THE OLD

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ONES

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. ANOTHER DISADVANTAGE, ONLY RICH

BUSINESS

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BUSINESSES

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CAN PAY FOR COMMERCIALS WHILE SMALL ONES ARE NOT ABLE TO DO THAT.

CONSUMER

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CONSUMERS

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WILL ONLY KNOW ABOUT THE ADVERTISED PRODUCT BUT NOT THE OTHER IN CONCLUSION, MANY COMPANIES USE ADVERTISING TO FIND THEIR WAY TO CONSUMERS. AND PROMOTE THEIR PRODUCTS,

HOWEVER

SUCH

PATH

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MAY DAMAGE

PEOLPE

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PEOPLE

THINKING AND CAN MAKE THEM BLOW THEIR SAVINGS ON ITEMS THEY DO NOT REALLY NEED.

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1Word repetition
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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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In theie advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people، however, ، think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

task 2: in some countries, young people have become richer, healthier anf live longer, but they are less happy. What are the causes? What can be done to address this situation?

Life has become much more stressful compared to our parent’s generation. As a result, stress-related illnesses are increasing around the world. What are the causes of stress among young adults and what do you think can be done to overcome this problem?

Some people think parents should supervise their children's activities closely, while others believe children should have more freedom. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?