Some people think that men and women have differnt qualities, therefore ,some certain jobs are suitabel for men and some jobs are suitable for women.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

some
people
argue that stereotypes of
women
and men are different ,
consequently
, some jobs are offered based on
gender
.I
completly
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completely
disagree with
this
point of view as
gender
cannot represent
people
's qualities and
its
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not the main factor to get a job. On the one hand ,
people
's qualities are determined by attitude and the environment in which they live rather than
gender
.
Althouh
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Although
,
sexual
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hormones
such
as testosterone, have some influence on
people
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behaviour,
people
's
detemination
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determination
,
courageous
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and punctuality can
be consider
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as
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the most important factors of
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the qualites
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qualites
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quality
qualities
of
people
.
For example
, some
women
work in skyscrapers because they are not afraid of higher altitudes, while some men are afraid.
In addition
,some environments challenging; they have to face different tasks on a daily basis, and
as a result
, it
create
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extraordinary
people
than those who live in normal
socienty
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society
.
for instance
, the tribe
women
who live forest has
partucular
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particular
charactors
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characters
such
as
climbling
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climbing
trees ,
fight
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with animals and foraging as spend
whole
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their whole
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life in
chalangeble
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challengeable
changeable
condition.
On the other hand
, skills, experiences, and qualifications are more important to
obtaining
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a job than
gender
. Because
gender
type is not critical to completing a career task, many employers have not considered a candidate's
gender
.
For example
, in the past,
people
believed that certain jobs,
such
as working in a saloon , were only for
women
. Today,
however
, men are the most successful in the saloon industry because they work hard and have acquired
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knowledge
knowledg
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knowledge
Inconclution
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In conclusion
, rather than
gender
,
people
's qualities are derived from their
behavior
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and
also
professional abilities are the primary candidate selection criteria.
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