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Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way.

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Some people support that social networks have a negative influence on teenagers and affect their way
to make
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 personal ties
such
 as family bonds or
friends
while
 others believe that these media sites could have a positive impact.
This
 essay will attempt to explain both views and explain why I agree with the population who face these networks. On the one hand, it is well known that the internet has become the most relevant discovery of
this
 century. Communications have changed throughout the
last
 50 years and these new ways to access communication have a positive impact. Nowadays, people can have
friends
 around the world or can keep in touch with their relatives thanks to these apps that allow other forms of relation.
For example
, if a couple needs to work in different cities, they could maintain their relations using different apps
such
 as Skype, Whatsapp, or Telegram.
On the other hand
, it is obvious that all of these improvements have some disadvantages and it is a current problem. Nowadays, it is so common to see a scenario where a family is having lunch but the kids and the teenagers are looking at their mobiles, staying connected all day.
This
 situation has a negative impact not only on the relationships but
also
 on their neurodevelopment, which is not ready for all
this
 amount of information.
For instance
, if a group of
friends
 decide to meet together, it could be positive to turn off their devices to focus on their
friends
 and to increase these relationships.
To conclude
, I believe that social networks have many advantages
such
 as keeping in touch with your family who live abroad,
however
, it is necessary to use them in a correct way because if not, people will see their relationships broken
as a result
 of misuse.
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task response
Provide a clear opinion on the topic and support it with specific reasons and examples.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion need to be clearer and more directly related to the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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