Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, people living in
industrial
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Era start to think seriously about the environment and the
issues
which start to appear related to
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how to solve and manage them. People argue
on
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the most environmental problem facing our planet recently. Most of them
believes
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it is the loss of certain types of
plants
and animal, while others see there
is
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more important
issues
to handle.
This
essay will argue both views and reveals how
loss
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the loss
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of these species is entirely important to solve.
Firstly
, some people believe that
issues
like
pollution
of
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or
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traffic jams is a serious
problem
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problems
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and should
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the
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priority in
problems
solving plans.
This
because
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of different gases which
results
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result
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from
pollution
and naturally it affects our plant layers negatively,
besides
producing more CO2 in
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which
cause
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causes
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a lot of diseases and health
problems
.
For instance
, big cities nowadays have the highest rate of
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air
and studies
shows
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that most
of
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respiratory
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the respiratory
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health
problems
start basically
form
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from
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air
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we
breath
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. Leaving all these
problems
and focusing on
plants
and animals only will eventually damage our community completely.
Nevertheless
, I argue that
although
pollution
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the pollution
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issue
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issues
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should be considered, the obvious decreasing rate of
plants
and animal species are serious danger
sign
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, which should be urgently controlled. To illustrate, having
less
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plants
resulting
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results
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in a decrease in the overall amount of green areas, which
responsible
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is responsible
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for producing the
air
we
breath
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breathe
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. Giving less attention to
this
increasing problem will affect the entire Nutritional Pyramid which is the reason for continuing
the
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life on our planet. To sum up,
although
there are important environmental
issues
such
as
pollution
and traffic, I believe
its
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it's
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more serious to focus on solving the decreasing amounts of
plants
and animal species which plays environmental and personal roles in
humanity
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existence.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
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