the internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also caused problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems related to internet an what solutions can you suggest?

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changed the
people
's
behavior
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of treating
information
quicker and wider.
However
, it is argued that the progress of
internet
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generates crucial
problems
, which did not exist until the emergence of
internet
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.
This
essay will address some of the
problems
caused by
internet
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, and propose solutions.
To begin
with, one of the most serious
problem
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is money fraud. As Individuals use
internet
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to buy something
,
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or manage their saving by net banking, the number of individual
information
inputted to
internet
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is dramatically increasing. According to
these trend
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, some criminals began to huck
these
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this information
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information
via
internet
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.
Nevertheless
, almost all criminals
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with
internet
crimes are not captured, it is because of the crime opacity. To solve these situations, The companies, which serve
internet
service
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,
such
as online shopping,
net
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and net
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bunking
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banking
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, should utilize the technology, especially for managing customers' identity
information
.
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Japanese banks,
for example
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they
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use "one-stop persuade", which is the function to check identity twice. Another
problem
concerns
the
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addiction
of
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internet
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. As the
internet
is blending into
people
's
life
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, the average
time
of using
internet
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is much longer than a decade. Some
of
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people
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the people
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using
internet
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, spend their
time
on
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only
sleep
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or doing
internet
. It means that these
people
are almost the addict of
internet
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the internet
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.
For instance
, in Japan, many
people
cannot stop playing
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games
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, which
is
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internet
game
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games
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, even if they have
a
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intension
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to leave from
internet
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. And
then
, some of them have the tendency to suicide.
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situation
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become one of
Japanese
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social
problems
. For
this
problem
, governments should make the restriction
to
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the
time
of using
internet
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, especially
children
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for children
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, who cannot control their
mind
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. I believe these
restriction
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have the big possibility to suppress
this
problem
even if the target is only children. In conclusion, to solve these
internet
problems
,
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the company
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company
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companies
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should take care of treating
information
.
In addition
, governments should restrict the
time
of
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internet
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  • cybersecurity
  • phishing
  • identity theft
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • social isolation
  • internet addiction
  • data privacy
  • digital literacy
  • regulations
  • awareness programs
  • manipulate
  • proliferation
  • consent
  • escalated
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