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The continued rise in the world’s population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

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The two maps illustrate the different changes
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 the town of Stokeford during the years 1930 and 2010. Overall, we can see that a lot of parts where were farmlands have been substituted by many lines of new houses.
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, we can see that we have many new buildings by the year 2010.
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 the Post office
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 of the shops and the land for the animals that
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 in front
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 same river Stroke, people
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 constructing more and more
acommodations
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accommodations
accommodation
. The same
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 happened with the livestock land behind the primary school and beside the
ramaning
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remaining
 bridge. As we can see on the map, the old big gardens are
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another bigger building for the older people, the retirement home.
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, just behind the school, we can see
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2010 new larger houses. To conclude, Stokeford between
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 1930 and 2010 was increasing
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 number of houses and constructing new important buildings.
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