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Learning at university would be more effective if men and women were educated separately. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#university #men #women
Many think that studying at college would be more efficient if male and female
students
 learn separately. Personally, I mostly believe that it would be more effective if men and women
are
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 taught together in university. Both male and female
students
 who learn in higher education together could enhance their debating ability.
In other words
, they are given the opportunity to debate and communicate with the opposite
gender
 more often. They could exchange a larger variety of opinions and ideas as they are of different genders and have quite different dispositions. To elaborate, men have a tendency to be energetic and willing to take risks,
whereas
 women are often patient and placid.
For example
, if a female student had a debate about a certain topic with a male student, they would probably have different opinions about it
due to
 their different temperaments.
Furthermore
, their ability to work together would
also
 be fostered. Owing to the fact that they need to cooperate with their teammates ,who are of the opposite
gender
, they need to comprehend those teammates’ opinions, characters, strengths and weaknesses in order to be productive and successful when working on group projects or tasks. Admittedly, tertiary
students
 would have more time to study if they
are
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 taught separately from the other
gender
. Not being involved in relationships or dating, they have more time to revise and study for their exams.
In addition
,
students
 of the same
gender
, by and large, have quite a lot in common. They often share similar or even the same interests or pastimes.
Therefore
, they understand each others' strengths, weaknesses or needs better. In conclusion, even though
students
 would be able to have prolonged periods of time to study if they separately fewer distractions, I still believe that they should be educated together since they acquire some useful skills for their work in the future.
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task response
Ensure the essay fully addresses the prompt and provides a clear stance on the issue of separate education for men and women at university.
coherence and cohesion
The essay demonstrates good coherence and cohesion, with clear progression of ideas and effective use of linking devices. However, more advanced vocabulary and sentence structures can be used to enhance coherence further.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • single-gender education
  • coeducational
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • social dynamics
  • learning styles
  • cognitive differences
  • participation rates
  • diverse workplaces
  • educational outcomes
  • psychological implications
  • empirical evidence
  • inclusivity
  • reinforcement of gender roles
  • gender-segregated
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