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Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #school #children #homework #teachers #role #education
Homework
 given by the teachers is a real discussed argument because not everyone thinks
that is
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 form of
education
. In my opinion, the role of
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homework
 is extremely important for a
right
, full, good and healthy
education
. Considering a situation in which a five-six years old child does not receive any type of
homework
 to do, he or she will probably spend all afternoon playing,
in particular
, if he or she can decide
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 his or her own without an
adult
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 influence.
Hence
,
this
 could mean that these children do not learn how to organize
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study time and they will grow up with the idea that doing good work at school is enough. It is clear that reaches with the
education
 level (as high school and university)
this
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not know how to
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This
 is the reason why I think that
homework
 is important: they teach you how to have an efficient method to study on your own and to learn how to organize it.
On the other hand
, all children should spend a lot of hours playing during their childhood but they can
also
 learn how
to begin
responsable
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responsible
 having fun. In fact,
this
 depends
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 the teacher which should create add type of
homework
 for each range of age and help the students
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shows
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difficulty
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organization or home study.
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 my experience, only
few
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 teachers really do
this
 and
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 easy that young students
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 early feeling stressed and
this
 is completely unfear because
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 a good
education
 and assistance is a
right
.
Therefore
,
homework
 is not only a list to complete but a life teaching that could really help you in the future, but it must be introduced in
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 attention of the teachers.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instills discipline
  • Deepen understanding
  • Independent learning
  • Reinforcement
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum insight
  • Burnout
  • Student stress
  • Leisure time
  • Relevance of assignments
  • Project-based learning
  • Interactive learning
  • Individual learning styles
  • Conducive study environment
  • Homework policy
  • Balanced approach
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