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In some country, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out the history of the house and building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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Nowadays, the history of
people
’s habitation is gaining more interest from the population since many technical or environmental issues
has
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 been discovered. In
this
 essay, I will try to discuss the reason for doing
investigation
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an investigation
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about
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into
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 the living space and
then
 explain the methods that
people
 often use to find accurate
information
.
People
 are interested
on
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in
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 the historical documentation of
the
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apply
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living spaces for many reasons. It is obvious that the stability, security and
the
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sustainability of any space are related to its past
condition
.
Furthermore
, the understanding of any defect or incoherences
on
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in
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 the construction process of a building may lead to
take
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 urgent
countermeasure
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countermeasures
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 to correct and anticipate
on
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apply
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eventual deterioration.
For instance
, in
Senegal
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,Senegal
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 the court which was constructed on a fault zone due to the lack of knowledge of the geological
condition
 has been immediately demolished. In order to get reliable
information
 about the historical
condition
 of the infrastructures,
people
 usually appeal to governmental services.
In addition
, due to the availability of data on
internet
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the internet
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,
people
also
 use
online
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platform
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platforms
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 as a source of
information
. Another crucial source of
information
 would be probably
university
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a university
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 thesis or research conducted by
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a student
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student
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students
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 since they may contain a number of essential
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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. In conclusion,
people
 are becoming more conscious about the technical background of their houses and the surrounding environment.
This
 staggering curiosity is mostly motivated by the need in terms of safety and
healthy
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condition
. In order to get suitable
information
, public services
such
 as city
office
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offices
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 or governmental agencies are generally contacted.
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