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some people prefer to have temporary jobs,which means they only work a few month in year and use the rest of the time to do why want what is your opinion.

In
the
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recent
years
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 more and more
people
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 are focused on their desires so they choose
temprorary
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temporary
 jobs.
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 type of
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people
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person
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 spends only several months on work per year and
use
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uses
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 the rest of the
time
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 to do what they want. On the one hand, it is an
insame
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insane
in same
 idea because
this
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 attitude has bag effect on our career and self-realization. The only way to reach high goals is by working hard so spending a big part of the year on
leisure
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time
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 is destroying factor.
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, famous and successful
people
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such
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 as Elon Musk are working long hours to be successful. Success is always about hard
working
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.
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, it is
highly
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 viral example because many
people
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 are dreaming about
this
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 lifestyle so our society will suffer from
the
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 massive crisis if a big part of
people
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decide
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 to spend more
time
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 on
leisure
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time
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.
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, our society will become much happier if it happens because
leisure
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 activities make us happy so the level of stress will decrease. In order to
that
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do that
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 the number of illnesses which are connected with stressful
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 will
also
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 decrease so
people
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 will become healthier.
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, illnesses
such
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 as cancer will take
less
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 lives because the main reason
of
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 it will decrease.
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,
people
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 might find their passion which is really important to have. More individuals will connect their job with
the
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passion so it should
increases
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 the number of individuals
which
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who
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 are satisfied with their job. To sum up, in my opinion taking more
time
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 on
leisure
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 activities has more advantages than disadvantages because free
time
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 activities make us happier and
also
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 help us to find our passion.

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Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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