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Make a report and summarize the main features and make a comparision where relevant

The given table depicts the change in earnings from the hire of rooms, cafe, funding of council tower and funding of bodies as well as how much money Brooklyn Hall has to purchase and its profit over the interval of three years. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the hire of rooms is the highest income of
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 building meanwhile in terms of the lowest earning, the cafe’s revenue is the answer.
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, the profit is slightly increased because Brooklyn hall’s expenditures have an increasing trend, the opposite is true with its payments. According to the table, the revenue from the hire of rooms was
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32000
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 in the
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 year after which it experienced a moderate rise to 34000
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 before ending the period at 33000
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. The income from the cafe started at 3000, followed by significant growth to 6000 in the
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 year. The funding of the council tower and bodies got 20000
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 in the
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 year, after that there was a considerable drop to 15000
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 with the payment from the funding of council tower while that from the bodies remained unchanged.
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, the total income of Brooklyn Hall went up from 72000
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 to 78000
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. Similar changes can be seen in the figure for the expenditure, it dramatically rose by 11000
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, from 63000 to 77000.
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 the reason why there was a steady drop in the rest of the profit of
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 building ,9000
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 to 1000
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, in the period of three years.

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