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the level of noice around us is costantly increasing and is affecting the quality of our lives .What cause the noice what can be done about it

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Sound
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pollution
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 is gradually rising in our environment, negatively impacting people's lives. The main reasons for
noise
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 are city traffic and poorly designed
cities
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. Separate solutions are required to address these issues. On the one hand, traffic congestion has increased in major
cities
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 during rush hours, and
noise
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pollution
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 has increased unpredictably
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 of so many
cars
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 on the road.Many people prefer to drive their own
cars
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 because they are more convenient and efficient.
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, many
cities
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 have not been designed to minimize
sound
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pollution
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.
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, some factories are located near residential
areas
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, which generate loud
noise
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 throughout the day. To
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reduce
sound
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pollution
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, governments should design
cities
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 properly to keep
noise
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 levels at a healthy
level
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.
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, residence
areas
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 should be established far away from factories, and highways,
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, the
noise
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level
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 in urban
areas
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 should be continuously measured, and if the
level
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 rises, immediate action should be taken.
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, a public transportation system should be developed to reduce
cars
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 on the road. If buses and trains are affordable and reliable, many people will use them to commute, reducing the number of vehicles on the road and the
noise
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 they make.
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, to prevent
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 transmission,
sound
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 barriers, whether natural or man-made, can be built near city
areas
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 and highways.
Sound
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 travels through the air, and if we can block it, we can reduce
noise
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pollution
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.
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, the government has already stated its intention to plant trees alongside roads;
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,
sound
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pollution
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 in residential
areas
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 can be significantly reduced. To summarize,
noise
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pollution
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 has exceeded our healthy
level
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as a result
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 of too many
cars
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 and poor city design;
however
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, improving public transportation and implementing
sound
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-reducing measures can reduce
noise
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pollution
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 to a healthy
level
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.
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