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One of your friends wants to apply for a job at a summer school camp as a sports trainer. Write a letter to the camp manager to recommend your friend. In your letter: osay how well you know your friend odescribe the qualifications and experience that your friend has oExplain why your friend would be suitable for this job.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I hope
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 letter finds you in good health. I am writing to wholeheartedly recommend my friend,
Nancy
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, for the sports trainer position at your esteemed summer school camp. Having known
Nancy
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 for several years, I can attest to their exceptional dedication, passion, and proficiency in sports training. She possesses a remarkable ability to connect with individuals of all ages and skill levels, fostering an inclusive and supportive learning environment. She has been working in
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 area since high school and she got
bachelor’s
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a bachelor’s
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 degree and
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 she continued her studies and got
master’s
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a master’s
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 degree. She has done 5 research articles about the role of sports in
childrenen’s
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children’s
 lives.
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, she is working as head trainer in two gyms. I am confident that she would make a valuable addition to your team, contributing not only through her skills but
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 through her positive encouraging approach.
Nancy
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 has the ability to create an environment that promotes teamwork, discipline, and most importantly fun. Thank you for considering
Nancy
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 for
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 position. I am more than happy to provide any additional information if needed. I am certain that she would be a tremendous asset to your camp. Best regards, Shahid

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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a separate main idea for clearer structure, for example, dedicate individual paragraphs specifically to discuss your friend's qualifications, experience, and suitability.
task achievement
Expand on how your friend's qualifications and experience make her particularly well-suited to a sports trainer job at a summer school camp.
coherence cohesion
Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to connect ideas more smoothly within and across paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Avoid repetitive sentence structure to enhance the readability of your letter.
task achievement
In the opening and closing paragraphs, maintain the formal tone consistent with the rest of the letter while ensuring the greeting and sign-off are appropriately formal and matched.
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