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Large numbers of visitors can endanger ancient archealogical sites such Machu Picchu. in your opinion, is it more important to try to preserve such site or to allow public access to them ?

#numbers #visitors #archealogical #sites #machu #picchu #site #access
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archeological
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site
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 preserved is more important than
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 a lot of tourists visit them.
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different
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way
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such
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 a set of documentary programs ,
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lot of
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picture
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pictures
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.
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 these
site
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 is important for two reasons.
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 is that when visitors visit these
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 they might break some area they thank
it
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is not important whereas it
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 a lot of unknown values .
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example
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city
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the city
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some visitors broke some rocks and fir
it
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writing
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 on
it
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old
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 language which some university groups claim these rocks may lead them to discover who
life
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 in
this
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are
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 before 5000 years .
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, some visitors may have political and economic intentions to change the
realty
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 and identity of
these location
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this location
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.
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not
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 imaginary it is
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 in some
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 in the south same group of
political
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the political
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party
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parties
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 try to change some facts about one famous spot there to have credit in
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 election
which
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most
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ordinary
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the ordinary
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 people
tent
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tend
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 to believe that because these political people have free access to
this
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 location and try to show that
the
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they
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 have pure truth. for
that
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 we have to be more careful and not allow
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 truth. To sum up
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old
site
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sites
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 should always
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 government supervision and control
all
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of
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ways
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 that allow these
location
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be
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 in the same
forms
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form
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 for more discoveries and new explorations that may solve the mystery of the past.
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