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Countries should not replace their traditional culture with modern culture . To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#countries #culture
Absolutely, Countries should not replace their traditional
culture
 with modern
culture
. I completely agree with
this
 statement.
Hence
, individuals are
foregetting
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forgetting
 their traditional
values
 and completely busy with modern
culture
.
Besides
, technology
have
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 become common in current
times
.
Firstly
,
people
 are so busy with modern
culture
. In current
times
 and forgetting to remember traditional
culture
.
Secondly
, competition
have
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an increase
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increase
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 in current time human kind does not remember ancient
values
.
Consequently
,
their
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were
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was
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 no technology in ancient
times
 now our youth is busy
in
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with
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 technology that
their
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there
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 can't give respect to each other.
Moreover
,
parents
 should teach
our
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their
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children
 traditional
culture
 not modern
culture
.
On the other hand
, family members are moving to western countries and not remembering our traditional
values
.
Parents
 are telling their
children
 to befriend
with
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western
children
 and our
children
 are busy
doing
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dancing, drinking and smoking etc
Parents
 should tell our
children
 to be close
with
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to
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 our traditional
culture
 not
with
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to
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 modern
culture
.
As a result
,
parents
 should give proper education to
our
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their
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children
 at home before sending them to school. In conclusion, our traditional
culture
 was started by our forefathers so we should have to respect our old
values
. Nowadays, many
people
 are earning
large
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amount
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amounts
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 of money and not remembering our traditional
values
. Feeble
people
 used to say money is
root
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the root
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 of all evil. In recent
times
 many
people
 are eating any kind of fast food and not remembering our traditional food. In
adittion
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addition
, what our forefathers used to eat and exercise we should
also
 follow the routine. Many
people
 used to say that our traditional
culture
 was one of the best no matter how much
world
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the world
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 developed.
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