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The continued increase in obesity is the greatest problem faced by developed countries at the present time. What are the causes of this continued increase? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by developed countries today?

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Most developed
countries
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 are facing now, the problem of a rise in the number of overweight
people
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.
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 problem can have multiple reasons, we will discuss some of them in
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 essay and I personally opine on the idea of the proponents.
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,
People
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 in developed
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 are having unhealthy lifestyles
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 as, eating fast
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 and having no balanced diet. The consequence of
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 the growth in the number of obesity even among children.
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, a study shows that most young
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 in the USA are overweight because of eating junk
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 and they have more chances to have a heart attack in the future.
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,
people
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 are lazy to cook healthy
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 at home because they don't have time after a long day at work
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 of that they order online
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.
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, the population in rich
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 less practising sports or have a sedentary lifestyle, compared with
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 from poor
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 that live a hard life and work in some professional that need physical power like construction.
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 of that the proportion of obesity is very high in developed
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. Nowadays, after , the coronavirus most
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 in rich
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 are working remotely and spending more time sitting at home without any exercise. in conclusion, the percentage of obesity has increased and
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 is one of the biggest problems faced by developed
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 at the present time, in my ,opinion To curb
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 problem,
people
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 need to make self-aware and with the help of the government, local organizations should step forward and educate society more about its bad effects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • prevalence
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • calorie intake
  • nutrition
  • balanced diet
  • economic factors
  • caloric intake
  • marketing strategies
  • genetically predisposed
  • metabolic rates
  • physical activity
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