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The supplied bar chart illustrates the percentage of different physical activities in four nations.Time spent on reading is predicted by the given bar chart.The rate of books is sketched out by the number graph in non-identical states.Overall, all the games have a considerable concentration.
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, the gym is the major one.
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, the ratio of reading is the same in all three states. The amount of books in
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 B is smaller than all others.
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 with, it is clear from the chart that, in
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 D, the gym was in good standing.And in other countries, its ratio remained level. In state C, the percentage of people running was over 10%.
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, in two other hometowns, its rate remained static. But
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 B was on top of the list with almost 25%. The prevalence of other couple games was roughly below 20%. The time spent on reading in the three nations was comparable. In
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 B, the reading habit dropped the ratio, which accounted for 20 minutes per day. The expenditures on books were almost 7 per cent in every
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural convergence
  • global community
  • international relations
  • economic interdependence
  • cultural heritage
  • homogenization
  • consumerism
  • throwaway culture
  • carbon footprint
  • global warming
  • environmental degradation
  • fast fashion
  • processed foods
  • public health
  • local economies
  • multinational businesses
  • economic decline
  • economic diversity
  • economic resilience
  • job creation
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