Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Many theories, which recently came up, argue against the government about the

responsability

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responsibility

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the increasing trend of fat children.

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might become a serious theme if we don't keep it under control. On one side I do not agree with these ideas, on the other side, I think that states should find out a way to solve the problem.

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of all, I believe that the most important role is played by the parents, who should teach an equally balanced diet. The

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mentioned should include all nutrients type and should keep the child energic and

helthy

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healthy

. In my opinion, the family is the main reason

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obesity, because kids are mostly influenced by their loved ones. Had it not been for my relatives, I would have risked

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in

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the above illness too.

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, a great part of the job has to be done at school, where the government could add nutritional education as an object to help young people keep healthy

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what they eat. The state has the power to manage a large part of kids' growth.

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, it is needed to increase the government's interest, because it is its concern to have welfare all

overe

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over

the country. As an example, the central power could introduce rules and higher requirements in

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canteens or hire some

psycological

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psychological

experts to improve the situation. Summing up, I think that everybody

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should

active

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partecipate

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participate

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the

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apply

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obesity building

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. Indeed, both of the mentioned

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have

responsability

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responsibility

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future

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generation's

condition

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