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These days, more and more people prefer to use shared transport such as buses, trams or carsharing applications on their smartphones rather than driving their own cars. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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in recent times, the number of
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communities who have used
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public
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 increasing year by year. I believe there are some the advantages
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sharing
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transportation
,
such
 as decreasing the number of carbon dioxide and the cost
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 daily. it is true that some people who are using the sharing
transportation
 will help the world
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 the carbon in the atmosphere. green lifestyle is a trending habit nowadays. in that case, most
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people
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the people
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 are trying to apply it in any aspect
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 their life, including riding.
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environmentalist usually
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prefers
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prefer
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 use the commuter line
than
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over
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 their
motorcyle
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motorcycle
 to go to their office.
furthermore
, sometimes they late come
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to the company because they
are need
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 more time. undoubtedly, when using
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public
transportation
 we must follow their schedule, so we need to spare more time to get on time to the place.
in addition
, using the sharing
transportation
 is not only reducing the emission of gas but
also
 reducing
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in
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daily. the
transportation
 that
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 by the government take
a
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 cheapest price so it is affordable for all groups.
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some people who
using
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 the
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 busses, can get
best
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 offering when they
using
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 the commuter line too.
moreover
, they can save
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money for
another thing
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other things
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 like foodstuff or clothes. in a nutshell, using
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public
transportation
in
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daily has more
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advantages. the benefits are, reducing the carbon in the atmosphere and reducing the cost
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daily.
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