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Many people prefer to use public transportation while others say that personal cars are the best mode of transportation. Excessive use of private cars is considered to be the main reason for the traffic jam in many cities and that’s why the use of public transportation is encouraged. In your opinion what are the pros and cons of using public transport?

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While some
people
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 prefer to use their personal vehicles, others opt for public transportation. It
is widely believe
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 that the frequency of private
cars
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 has a tremendous contribution to traffic jams in cosmopolitan cities, so public transport should be used
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.
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, I believe using public transit services has both advantages and
disadvatages
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disadvantages
. On the one hand, regarding
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benefits, if individuals utilize local
transportations
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transportation
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,
congestions
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 and accidents will be reduced significantly. Since a number of
people
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 travel by
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 same transport, there will be fewer
cars
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 on the roads and
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 lessen traffic problems.
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, that countable vehicles are in sight leads to clear vision and lowers the chances of crashing each other.
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,
people
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 may find it difficult to avoid other
cars
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 when abundant are moving at the same time.
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, public transportation plays an important role in preserving the environment.
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 is because
transports
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 trigger emissions, which cause air pollution.
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, increasing
usage
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 of local
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transports
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transport
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 prevents air problems.
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, it is undeniable that local transit has several drawbacks.
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, public
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 are insecure.
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, on public vehicles, individuals having diverse occupations travel together so passengers often meet criminals and suffer from their behaviours.
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, on buses,
people
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 are
frequenly
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frequently
 pickpocketed or harassed. As a consequence, public transit services create conditions for the rampaging of unlawful activities and result in
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of
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 citizens.
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,
this
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 kind of transportation is unreliable. To illustrate, sometimes, trains can arrive later than the time in the schedule, which may cause numerous
people
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 to be late for school or important seminars.
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, with personal
cars
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, men can go whenever they want in order to be on time. In conclusion, crowds have different opinions about public
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transports
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. I believe
people
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 should take both its pros and cons into consideration so that they can make a suitable decision for themselves.

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