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Some people believe that a college or university education should be available to all students. Others believe that higher education should be available only to good students. Discuss these views. Which view do you agree with? Explain why.

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nowadays, education is the most important part of our lives and I totally agree with all the people who can get admission and will go to university
however
 in my opinion students who
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 apply for that there are many reasons why higher education must be available just for good pupils
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, good pupils are able to learn well and it is easy for teachers that
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 I had one teacher who told me when most of the students are excellent in their course I can teach difficult subject
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, when the classes are filled with fine pupils they have high competition in a study that
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 subject cause improves final results. many studies have shown that the basis of my view is based on many reasons, I'm of the opinion all students have the right to apply for higher education but maybe they won't be successful in
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