Some children spen hours every day on thier smartphones. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

It is often argued that there are some
children
who are spending their
time
on their smartphones every day. In my opinion,the growth of smartphone usage
time
for
children
has more harmful effects than its benefits. 
First
of all,
children
who spend their whole
time
on their smartphones are likely to lack
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social bonding in real life. If they are stuck to their
phones
for a long
time
, they are unlikely to meet and hang out with their
friends
at playgrounds or in central parks.
Also
, they would feel more comfortable and pleasure when they are with their
friends
on the internet rather than
friends
in real life. If these bad situations are continued, they will be likely to lose bonding with their family and
friends
.
For example
, many kids who appeared on TV shows because of their social ability issues had common in being addicted to their
phones
and not being willing to meet their
friends
from their schools. That's why I believe that
children
's being stuck to their
phones
has more disadvantages. 
Second
,
children
who are addicted to their
phones
have
a
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little ability
of
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creativity and
studying
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. When they are on
phones
, they are unlikely to think and have ideas of something since they just watch videos that are made by other people or play games which can
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for immature kids.
As a result
, their brains stop thinking deeply and become hardened. It leads to big damage when it comes to their grades in their school.
For instance
, there are several studies that students who are used to
spen
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spend
their every
time
on their
phones
have gotten more
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than students who aren't.
Thus
it can't be denied that spending much
time
on their devices brings unfavourable situations.  In conclusion, I strongly believe that the increasing number of
children
who are addicted to their
phones
is a very risky trend because they are more and more lacking social bonding in their life, and they are becoming reverse people of geniuses.
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