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In many large cities, people waste hours of their time every day because of traffic congestions on the road. hat are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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These days, the matter that injures the metropolitan inhabitants is that they have to spend a great deal of time in
traffic
 jams on the roads.
This
 essay discusses the main causes of
this
 phenomenon and how we can solve it. The fact
that is
 really important is that
traffic
 congestion is a result of a lack of public
transportation
 and overpopulation in urban regions. On the one hand, most big cities do not have efficient public transport
systems
;
as a result
,
people
 should use their vehicles to travel to their offices, institutes and so forth.
For instance
, in the north of Tehran, the capital city of Iran, populations have to use their private cars inasmuch as public
transportation
 like the subway, bus, and so on are not available.
On the other hand
, the number of
people
 who emigrate to the urban areas to work or educate increases ;
however
, the roads and transport
systems
 in these towns do not have the capacity of these communities.
This
 issue can be solved by governments. On the one side, the mayors of cities should enhance public
transportation
 machines by alternatives the old items with the new ones that have the highest yield and speed;
additionally
, creating a chance that all citizens who live all over the city have access to these
systems
. On the other side, governments ought to encourage companies to have offices in various areas;
consequently
,
people
 are not required to migrate to metropolises.
In addition
, when universities create an opportunity that students to study remotely, the
traffic
 flow is reduced.
To sum up
,
traffic
 jams impact the quality of life in the new era;
moreover
, they are a consequence of the problem that public
transportation
 and the rate of
people
 have;
nevertheless
, authorities by improving transform
systems
 and avoiding immigration can prevent
this
 trend.
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grammar
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content
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content
The introduction clearly presents the problem of traffic congestion in urban areas.
structure
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points discussed in the essay.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • public transportation
  • urbanization
  • infrastructure development
  • traffic management
  • bottlenecks
  • single-occupancy vehicles
  • carpool
  • cycling lanes
  • pedestrian pathways
  • vehicular congestion
  • commute
  • road network
  • sustainable transport system
  • traffic flow
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