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Nowadays, an increasing number of people with health problems are using alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their normal doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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At the present, a myriad number of individuals are coping
their
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 health diseases with the help of
the
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alternative
drugs
 rather than going to hospitals for
physion
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physician
physio
. In my opinion, using
the
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alternative
drugs
 as a
treatment
 for people is a positive development. To be sure that having
an
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alternative
 medicine are being worthwhile for our society as a new way of
treatment
.
In other words
, most
of
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people
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the people
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has
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have
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 been treating himself or
herself
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themselves
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 with
drugs
 for around 5 years because of its convenience for humans
like
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when they feel
headache
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a headache
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 or toothache they are able to drink it with water ,
however
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this
 process of medical care
are
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is
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 rose at the peak level in
todays
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today's
 world.
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, 89
percent
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per cent
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  population of
USA
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the USA
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 has been utilizing
alternative
 medicine as a
treatment
instead
 of visiting their family doctor. There is no doubt that using medicines whenever they want without the permission of physicians may cause more problems , even
it
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if it
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 may arise a new
sickness
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sicknesses
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 for their health. For some,
this
 would be beneficial to consume
drugs
 when they feel sick
instead
 of visiting
doctors’
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doctors
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treatment
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for treatment
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, but
this
 process of
treating
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treatment
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 can be more dangerous for
humans
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human
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 life.
Although
this
 kind of
disadvantage
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disadvantageous
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 side of
treatment
,
this
 can be more helpful to reduce the ache of
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the patient
a patient
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patient
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patients
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 which was shown
on
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in
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 the statistics. To conclude, despite the fact that utilizing replacement
drugs
 has some negative side on the medicine, I feel that it can be much
helpful
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more helpful
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 to reduce
the
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pain more
effiently
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efficiently
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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