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These days we are seeing an increasing amount of violence on television and this is having a negative impact on children's beahaviour do you agree or disagree?

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Presently we can highlight that there is a rise in the аmount of violence on television and it has a negative impact on
children
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's behaviour. I totally agree with
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 statement because
cruelty
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 on
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 can lead to demolishing the mental health of
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 and
children
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 able to grow up as
criminals
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.
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, observing
cruelty
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. on
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 have a bad impact on
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's psychology or ever they can become psycho. Compared to adults' psychology
children
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's brain is not already established, they perceive information in a straight way.
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, their psychology is very weak and have a chance to get a bad impact from each bad picture or billboard on the street.
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, the fact that adults who suffer from
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 mental issues were watching
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 on
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 or another source. The amount of money spent on psychologist sessions is increasing every year and even after therapists' ,help some issues don't vanish.
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, sadism watched on
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 is prior key to being a cruel person or even being a criminal in future. Representing harsh scenes of an accident on
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 may lead to
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's way of growth and some bad implications could be inevitable. As an example, a big amount of
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 became
criminals
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 by
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 nested in their's childhood.
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 for
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 sake, a child who sees some bad stuff on
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 stops thriving at one moment. To conclude,
children
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 should watch only television for kids because
cruelty
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 might lead to some mental issues and contribute to
children
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's growth by making them
criminals
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.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • desensitizes
  • imitate
  • aggressive behaviors
  • fear and anxiety
  • overall mental health
  • social skills
  • increased aggression
  • healthy relationships
  • academic performance
  • increased stress
  • distraction
  • negative influence
  • exposure to violence
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