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Country should not replace their traditional culture with modern culture to what extent do you agree with this statement?

Every
nation
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 has its own
culture
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 and
rituals
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 that represent the
country
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 in front of the
world
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. The advancement of technology divide to become a small
place
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places
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, some
countries
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 replace their tradition and
rituals
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 ,
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, while others think it is not good for them. Well, according to me of course the
country
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 should not replace the traditional
culture
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 with the passage of time. To commence with it is crystal clear that each and every
country
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 has its own
culture
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 and traditions, which give them identity and make them unique in the
world
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 to be more precise. It is if a
nation
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, adapts, to other
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country's
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 cultures, and
rituals
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, it might be difficult to either find a different place to live in the
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 or perhaps
people
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 lose interest
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. Apart from
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, civilians of the
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also
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 have no
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 kind of feeling towards the
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,
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 as a patriotic feeling, among the public,
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, some developing
countries
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, Chase developed
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, tradition and being common village due to these
people
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,not only lose their cultural authenticity but
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 loss their original values. And
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,
countries
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 should try to explore their rich
culture
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 and heritage sites, which are tourism in them, and increase their revenue as well.
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, saw
people
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 argue that it is beneficial to replace their
culture
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 with modern practice because they lead the latest trend of the
world
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. Adult globalization is common
culture
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 everywhere so
people
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 do not feel like strangers whenever they visit any
nation
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.
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, mud modern
culture
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 is Fred, all around the
world
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 and public feel connected with others, who live in the different corner of the earth,
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 increase tourism trade, and Sean
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, in Canada, thousands of
people
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 add a Punjabi cultured anguish which makes Indian
people
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 a suitable place to live. They easily connect with the atmosphere of the
nation
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 as well. In conclusion, there are many benefits to adopting a modern
culture
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 but do not overlook the traditions and
rituals
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 of a
nation
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 which give a sense of identity

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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