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students at school and universities learn far more from lessons with teachers than from other sources( such as internet and television). to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#students #school #universities #lessons #teachers #sources #internet #television
Nowadays, undergraduate
students
 spend more time on
smart phones
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 and television even whilst in class,
thus
, they learn most lessons from the
internet
,
although
 some people are in a diverse
opinion
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opinions
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. I strongly agree with
this
 statement.
Firstly
, in the classroom lecturers mostly teach what
in
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 their syllabus for the term or semester,
some
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and some
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 of them don't even pay attention to other psychological needs of their
students
. There are social and extra curriculum activities like indoor games like scrabble, monopoly, chess etc that
students
 can benefit from but some of them are being forced to do it, while others just participate without learning anything but they rather prefer
internet
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the internet
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 where they have different varieties of games that of interest to them.
Furthermore
, tertiary
students
 are
of
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 the habit of using
internet
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the internet
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 for different
purpose
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purposes
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such
 as assignments,movies,
games
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and games
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 and sometimes get the
lastest
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latest
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 news from there.
However
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,
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others
uses
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television
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a television
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 for getting
informations
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information
pieces of information
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 like
weather
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the weather
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 forecast,sports or political news which help them to be updated about the current happening in the country and they
tends
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 to learn
alot
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a lot
 from that. On other hand, the use of WiFi gadgets can lead to distraction because it can be addictive and they end up most of their time there without achieving anything. Some
students
 even neglect their activities of daily just because they are watching something interesting on the
internet
. In summary,
students
 spend
most
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 time on the
internet
 and television than in the classroom,
therefore
 they learn lessons from the things they engaged in the most.
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