Some people believe that children of all ages should have extra responsibilities (for example, helping at home or at work). Others believe that, outside of school, children should be free to enjoy their lives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is true that childhood is a

time

of education and enjoyment;

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, some people think that kids should have other contributions towards society and family, in

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essay I will discuss both

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arguments in

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, in my

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children should have extra responsibilities and I will provide evidence to support my opinion. On the one hand, kids should be left alone to concentrate on their studies, they already have a busy schedule, being all day at school, and

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afterwards at home they have homework to do, it wouldn't be fair after all

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to give them extra tasks, in

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way, they

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homework nor tasks efficiently.

Moreover

, in their spare

time

, they are entitled to play outdoors with their friends, every child

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to have a special

time

to play because it has a great impact on their personality, a survey done in England recently has shown that

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children who spend more

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playing are happier than others.

On the other hand

, minors should be prepared for the real world, because in

this

stage of their lives, parents provide everything for them, helping their mothers do chores or aiding their fathers

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broken stuff over the house or even volunteering in some charity would give them a sense of responsibility,

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, it would give them a glance on how the real world operates. I totally agree with

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side, in my opinion, contributing

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those kind

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of activities would help them decide what to be and

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do in the future. To conclude, there are convincing arguments both for and against kids having extra responsibilities, but I believe that children should have other tasks

besides

studying and playing.