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Some people believe that children of all ages should have extra responsibilities (for example, helping at home or at work). Others believe that, outside of school, children should be free to enjoy their lives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #children #ages #responsibilities #home #work #school #lives
It is true that childhood is a
time
 of education and enjoyment;
however
, some people think that kids should have other contributions towards society and family, in
this
 essay I will discuss both
side
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 arguments in
details
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, in my
opinion
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 children should have extra responsibilities and I will provide evidence to support my opinion. On the one hand, kids should be left alone to concentrate on their studies, they already have a busy schedule, being all day at school, and
then
 afterwards at home they have homework to do, it wouldn't be fair after all
this
 to give them extra tasks, in
this
 way, they
won't be able to do neither
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 homework nor tasks efficiently.
Moreover
, in their spare
time
, they are entitled to play outdoors with their friends, every child
need
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 to have a special
time
 to play because it has a great impact on their personality, a survey done in England recently has shown that
they
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children who spend more
time
 playing are happier than others.
On the other hand
, minors should be prepared for the real world, because in
this
 stage of their lives, parents provide everything for them, helping their mothers do chores or aiding their fathers
repair
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 broken stuff over the house or even volunteering in some charity would give them a sense of responsibility,
in addition
, it would give them a glance on how the real world operates. I totally agree with
this
 side, in my opinion, contributing
in
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those kind
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 of activities would help them decide what to be and
to
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do in the future. To conclude, there are convincing arguments both for and against kids having extra responsibilities, but I believe that children should have other tasks
besides
 studying and playing.
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  • extra responsibilities
  • develop skills
  • life lessons
  • work ethic
  • sense of responsibility
  • contribute to
  • family
  • community
  • playtime
  • physical development
  • mental development
  • balance
  • enjoyment
  • guide
  • childhood
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