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Philippines is recoded as the over populated country in the asia. Do you agree or disagree?

#philippines #country #asia
The two maps
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 how the civic centre
changes
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 from the present and its future plan. It is conducted in
the
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mainland of China. Overall, there is an IELTS speaking and writing
corner
 in the middle of all the
establishment
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 in the present time
however
 it was replaced by
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a townhall
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townhall
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 in the future. Meanwhile, other facilities
is
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 relocated to
different
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corner
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 and some of
it
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 remained
untouch
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untouched
. At present time, it can be seen in
the
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North Avenue, that the Cinema is in between
of
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the two carparks which
is
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 accessible to both High
street
 and
Smith
street
. IELTS speaking and writing
corner
 is situated in the
center
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 of all buildings. Below
of
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it are different facilities which
composed
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 of
Exhibition
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 building
besides
 the High
street
, both
Council
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the Council
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 and Town hall
are
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 in the Middle.
Shopping
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center
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 and library
placed
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 together
in
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 the
corner
 of
Smith
street
 while Victoria Avenue is just nearby of all the aforementioned facilities. In the future,
cafe
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 and
hotel
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hotels
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 and
restaurant
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replaced both carparks
besides
Smith
street
 and High
street
. IELTS speaking and writing
corner
 was removed and
town
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 hall can be seen in the middle of the
civi
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civic
civil
center
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 which has a carpark in the underground
of
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the
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it
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. The civic centre
also
 erected
a council offices
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 which replaced the exhibition building; while
exhibition
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the exhibition
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 building was relocated below the shopping centre nearby
Smith
street
. Library
then
 relocated
besides
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 council offices which
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now known
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 as the underground library,
however
, Victoria Avenue was eradicated as well.
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