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Some people believe that university education should only be offered to those who can pay for their own courses and the government should not be expected to fund higher education. To what extent do you agree?

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In a number of countries, those at university have their degree courses funded by the government, but many
people
 nowadays assert that students should pay for themselves. whilst, There are many reasons to justify
such
 a viewpoint, I don't entirely agree with it.
Firstly
, the benefits of having a well-educated population or felt by all those in
society
.
This
 is because the general population gains when there is a ready supply of good doctors, engineers, teachers, and business
people
 who contribute to the welfare of all.
therefore
, it seems fair that all members of
society
 should contribute through a tax system, in order to pay for
such
education
.
Furthermore
, it is important that those who train to undertake
such
 roles are the most competent in the country . should
education
 be too expensive, It is likely that some of the most capable and talented young
people
 may be discouraged from studying, especially if they happen to come from a poor background. indeed, if the tax system is organized so that those earning more pay a higher level of tax,
then
 probably most graduates will pay back a good deal into
society
 over many years of work. Their
education
 will help them get better employment so they will probably contribute more money over a lifetime It is
also
 important to remember that an educated and cultured
society
 is a civilized one, and in principle, I believe that
education
 should be available to all young
people
 and that their financial backgrounds should not hold them back In conclusion,
while
 some
people
 argue that government money should not be spent on the university
education
 of individuals, I disagree entirely. I feel that
society
 as a whole benefit from supporting students in higher
education
 so the government should fund these costs.
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