Some people think that watching TV causes weight problems in children. Do you agree with this view? What solution you can suggest to tackle children’s weight problem?

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many hours at the tv could be a

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of obesity and other weight issues in kids. In

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essay I will clear my point of view, writing if I agree or disagree with

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affirmation and

and

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I will look for some

solution

to the

problem

of

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control. We are living in a highly industrialized society, where

technology

is an extended part of our daily life.

Children

start very early to know how to use

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dispositive.

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, it is

not

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anymore rare,

find

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kids of 4-5 years

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at the front of their parent’s telephone, watching YouTube. In my point of view, I can say that I’m firmly convinced that

technology

and Tv could represent a

problem

for

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child’s

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weight. In fact, more often parents leave

children

playing with their

phone

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, to have some moment for themselves, forgetting to teach them how to play and

having

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fun without television or computer or telephone, just because

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them

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with

technology

it is a faster method to make them distracted and calm. As a consequence, child pass a lot of hours in front of

screen

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, without moving but just watching them and

possibily

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possibly

eating food without regulation, which is a primary cause of

this

weight’s

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problem

. I will now

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some

solution

to

this

issue.

To begin

with, I think that a possible

solution

could be having some

moment

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to teach

children

how

have

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fun without stay glue to

the

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technology

,

hence

bringing them to the park,

making

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them socialize with the other kids. It is important

as

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parents,

find

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time for their own

children

’s education. Another possible

solution

, taking

children

away from television, is subscribing them to some gym activity,

such

as swimming.

In addition

, I believe that the

problem

should be addressed even

from

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the government,

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should prompt more activities on the territory and

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some

restriction

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on eating

at

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fast food under a certain age. To conclude, I think that with these solutions that I brought up, the

problem

of weight could be limited.