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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreignlanguage is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is no denying the fact that the main reason to learn a new
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 is for a job in
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country
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 or to visit it to do some work a.
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 it is a commonly held belief that there are a lot of things you can do when you know new foreign languages, there is
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 an argument that getting new languages are make you travel and talk to anyone in
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country
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.
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 essay will analyse
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 topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On the one hand, learning a new
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 makes you different you can go to any place in that
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 and talk to anyone you want and any topic
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 as football and music.
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, if you go to a football match and you want to buy a ticket and you do not know that
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 you will get into some trouble .
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, learning a new
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 makes you better than anybody.
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, if you are a doctor and you want to work in a hospital and you have a great CV with many languages you will take that job.
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, learning a new
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 for travel and work is very vital these days. It is
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 possible to say that every
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 has a different
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 except a few of them.
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, travel to some place to usually want to visit it.
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, if your family want to go to Spain
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 you should learn the Spanish
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. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
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 question. On balance,
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, I tend to believe that learning a foreign
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 is very essential these days your
language
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 is not enough you need to learn something new every day.
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