Some parents bring thier children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this.

These days parents spend a
lot
of money to buy everything for
thier
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their
children
including
toys
. As well as it has more impact
to
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children
's lifestyles.
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essay will sufficiently discuss the
prons
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pros
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and cons of pampering
one
's child with plenty
toys
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of toys
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. On the
one
hand, playing with
toys
is the best way to improve the skills of
children
during adolescence. In
this
technology area, the
toys
become so smart that they can help the
children
to develop strong analytical and logical skills.
For example
,
toys
like block building,
puzzle
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solving
more
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help
strengthening
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the mental thinking of the
children
.
In addition
to
this
, nowadays there are more families which have only
one
child, a baby can make relationships with the
toys
like his siblings and friends to feel less lonely. If there are associated with dolls, they will have an outgoing personality character.
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the other hand,
one
of the drawbacks is that if they spend a
lot
of time with dolls, they will become inactive and gain weight.
Moreover
, parents spend more time on
toys
to entertain
thier
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their
offspring
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family budget.
Furthermore
,
this
would reduce the ability the interact with other people.
Consequently
, the child would enjoy staying alone or playing with themselves. Statistics
,
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demonstrate that
children
who play alone are more likely to not adjust
in
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the
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society. In conclusion, a
lot
of parents are buying
thier
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their
offspring a massive amount of dolls.
However
, it can make an upward trend in
cheerfulness
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of our son and daughter.
Although
, it is not required to spend a
lot
of give them great infancy.
In other words
, it can be provided in different ways.
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