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Some people think it is better for children to have many short holidays during the year. Others believe it would be beneficial to have fewer, longer vacations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In a society where life runs everyday faster, a vacation should be an important part of our existence, as, without recess, it would be impossible to live, and it would be too stressful to manage in everyday routine. Thinking about the matter of the
holidays
 for children we have two points of view, which are who thinks
that is
 better to have just
one
 long holiday and who believes that it is better to have shorter
holidays
 I will examine both sides of the argument and, in the end, I will give my personal opinion.
To begin
 ,with
who
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those who
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 think is better a
one
 long holiday, to sustain that, they assume it has a major benefit for children
,
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 because they can totally stop their
homerwork
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homework
, and assignments, have spare time to spend with their parents, and friends, and develop new hobbies.
On the other hand
, those who think that
are
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better many
holidays
, but fewer, assumed
this
 thought because they believe that just
one
 holiday, even if longer, is not enough for children to make them have relaxed and break from their daily busy routine. In fact, they argue that more
holidays
 enable kids to have constant time to develop their leisure activities, friendship and relationship with their parents. I agree with those who sustain that are better many
holidays
, even if they could be shorter because, as previously written, they permit to gave regular short breaks, when kids come back to their daily routine. I think they could have been more willing to engage in their tasks. To conclude, schools should give students regular
layoff
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layoffs
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 and not just
one
 longer.
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