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Some say that sports play an important role in society. Others, however, think that it is nothing more than a leisure activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#say #sports #role #society #leisure #activity
The line graph gives data on the
number
 of
people
 living in a specific country, categorized
in
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 three main
age
 groups from 1960, with
prediction
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the prediction
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 of the population until 2040. The initial expression is that the percentage of citizens aged 65 or above is increasing,
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and whole
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whole
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while
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 the
number
 of residents who are between 64 to 14 or younger than 14
are
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 following the same pattern. The figure clearly shows that at the beginning of the
period
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 just above 10% of the population were at the
age
 of 65 or above and the
number
 of
people
 who were older than 65 years moderately raised to 20% in 1990 and
then
 witnessed a rapid growth of 10% until 2010 and it is forecasted that the
number
 of residents who are 65+ will face a rise from 30% in 2010 to roughly 50% in 2040.
On the other hand
, 30% of citizens were between the
age
 of 15 to 64 in 1960 and the numbers faced a downward trend at around 20% until 1990.
In addition
, the
number
 of
people
 at the
age
 of 15-64 had a drop from 20%
in1990
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in 1990
 to approximately 10%
at
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 2020 and it is foreseen that the
percentages
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 will reach exactly 10% at the end of the period.
Additionally
, the percentage of
people
 who were younger than 14 years old witnessed fluctuations at around almost 60% between 1996 and 1990 and had a decrease of about 10% until 2010 and predictions show that the
number
 of
people
 aged less than 14 years old will swiftly reduce until they reach well below 50% at 2040.
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Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social fabric
  • fostering
  • community spirit
  • health and wellness
  • national pride
  • leisure activity
  • entertainment
  • unwind
  • economic impact
  • generating jobs
  • boosting tourism
  • stimulating local economies
  • negative aspects
  • risk of injuries
  • pressure on young athletes
  • doping
  • corruption
  • essential societal component
  • responsible management
  • promoting
  • significant
  • merely
  • contributing
  • progress
  • acknowledging
  • value
  • emphasizing
  • balance
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