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You spent 2 weeks in Dubai. Explain what you did in those 2 weeks. What did you enjoy the most?

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During the Christmas ,holidays
Dubai
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 is swarmed with many people due to the many
tourist
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 attractions that attract people there. Within those two weeks, I was able to make new friends and
visit
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 some of the popular attractions
Dubai
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 has to
offer
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.
This
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 essay will describe in detail what my family and I did over the two-week period in
Dubai
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 and what I enjoy most. Throughout my two-week holiday in
Dubai
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, I was able to
visit
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 some of the attractions
Dubai
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 has to
offer
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 and experience them with friends. Our
first
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 day in
Dubai
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 we spent touring around
Dubai
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Mall
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, the biggest
mall
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 in the
world
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 and the many stores it has to
offer
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 as well as the entertaining themes around the
mall
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such
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 as the Horror house, Mirror maze, and the VR
world
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. Having experienced all that the
mall
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 had to
offer
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, we decided to go outside the
mall
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 where we would find
Dubai
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's most famous attraction, the Burj Khalifa, the biggest tower in the
world
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. Later on, we visited Atlantis, the hotel known for its beautiful aquarium where we were able to see several species of fish and take pictures of them.
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, we were able to
visit
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 Ferrari
World
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, a theme park with Ferraris as its theme. In Ferrari
World
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 there are many enjoyable rides,
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, my favourite ride was the ROSSA. The ROSSA was known for being the
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's fastest rollercoaster in the
world
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, being able to reach 240 km's in 4 seconds. In half a month I was able to
visit
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 some of
Dubai
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's well-known
tourist
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 points and enjoy myself.
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 though I enjoyed visiting these
tourist
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 points, they were not what I enjoyed most. What I enjoyed most during those two weeks was making new friends and being able to enjoy these experiences with them. While in the UAE, we were able to go and explore
Dubai
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 on our own and enjoy activities
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 as, watching Puss in Boots or going quad biking in the desert and racing each other. I enjoyed
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 aspect of the trip most as I was able to make new connections and potentially form lifelong bonds. Though I enjoyed visiting entertaining
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 points in
Dubai
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, what I enjoyed more was forming relationships with new people.
This
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 essay discussed what I had done in
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 and what I enjoyed most overall. In conclusion, I had a great time in the city of
Dubai
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.
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