Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effects on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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opportunities for doing physical
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of establishing
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individuals. In fact, while education is an essential point,
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colaboration
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collaboration
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body for humanity. The idea of mentally being strong requires physical acts.
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sport
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has a huge impact on
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healthy
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, considering the lack of labour power in the hospitals,
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and keeping our
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in a good way is essential for
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, human beings have been struggling with
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disease for almost 3 years and humanity
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the reality of
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problems in
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healthy
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systems all around the world. All in all, these are just
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of the reasons out of dozens
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supporting
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the idea of
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. While
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points above are considerable, there is
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aspect of
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issue that we should discuss. Education might play a significant role
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domestic well-being,
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society
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can improve the matter. When residents know how important is
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healthy
and some concrete results in their life might be
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useful
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developing their vision. At
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point,
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people
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on
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the
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nutritious
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crucially
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. The huge
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percentage
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a final note, the foods
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we eat and being aware of our
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are as much important as
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a sport
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sport
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sports
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. To sum up, there is a wide range of
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as how important
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sports,
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, and diets demonstrate that there is a balance between doing
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and other facilities for
succesfully
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successfully
successful
structure a
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healty
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healthy
society
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