As the world becomes technologically advanced, computers are replacing more and more jobs. Describe some job positions that may be lost because of computers and discuss at one problem that may result.

The advancement of mechanization has made an impact on people's everyday lives.
However
, due to the evolution of ,machinery many occupations have succeeded by computers leaving many without jobs.
This
essay will give examples of jobs that have been overtaken by systems and explain the detrimental effects of
this
. Due to automation, many folks have found themselves jobless as their positions become overrun with machinery. Cashiers, factory workers, and customer service are examples of professions that have been overrun with computers.
This
is because employers are looking for more efficient and productive methods which are less prone to making mistakes which allow for the business to make more capital and have fewer costs due to human mistakes. I, myself, used to work as a cashier
however
recently, I had been replaced as my employer added self-serve checkouts, leaving me jobless.
Therefore
improvements made to computerization will lead to more systems in harder jobs. There are several negative factors that could possibly occur due to
this
advancement. Factors
such
as increases in unemployment, as humanity gets replaced by computers.
This
has a detrimental effect as people work to earn money in order to survive and if they don't have the cash to buy essentials
such
as food, water and clothes,
this
will lead to crimes
such
as stealing. Another factor is homelessness, as a community will be jobless and no longer earn money, which means they won't be able to pay rent or their mortgages.
This
inability to pay their rent will lead to evictions and more of society living on the street. A similar situation happened to my neighbour as he was unable to pay his rent having been fired from his job as a toothbrush factory worker and now having to live in a nearby park. Though
this
evolution in computerization has several benefits, it has many negative costs affecting society.
This
essay argued that whilst the advancement of machinery is great, it has several bad influences on society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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