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Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think this is happening? How can we solve this problem?

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It is
obeserved
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observed
 that
people
 tend not to care about the
amount
 of
food
 they spend. Some problems can be caused by
this
 phenomenon, but there are some solutions to alleviate the issue.
To begin
 with, the reason why
people
 do not spend
food
 properly.
First
 of all, I believe that
people
 are living
the
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 most sufficient period of human race history. So
people
 could not realise the fact that how important it is and how many
people
 suffered due to the lack of
food
 in the
apst
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past
.
In addition
, when
people
 threw away
their
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 rest of
food
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their food
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, they cannot even see where it is going and how much it is. If they could see how much
food
 is thrown away, I’m sure they would not spend
food
 like
this
.
However
, I would like to talk about the solutions to solve
this
 phenomenon.
First
 and foremost, governments have to complement new policies about
regulation
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the regulation
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 of the
amount
 of
wasting
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wasted
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food
 which is adapted to every
houses
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house
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. To control all of the
people
, each
countries
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 government should regulate them and I believe that
this
 is the
most fair
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 way.
In addition
, warning
commercial
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commercials
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 or advertisements would be the way. If some advertisements keep warning
people
 to care about the
amount
 of
wasting
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wasted
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food
,
people
 can get alertness constantly. In conclusion,
although
people
 do not care about the
amount
 of
food
 they threw away. I believe that
this
 trend can be solved
by
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 some ways.
Therefore
, we should keep focusing on
this
 trend and
do
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not ignore
this
 problem.
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