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Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think this is happening? How can we solve this problem?

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It is
obeserved
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observed
 that
people
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 tend not to care about the
amount
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 of
food
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 they spend. Some problems can be caused by
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 phenomenon, but there are some solutions to alleviate the issue.
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 with, the reason why
people
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 do not spend
food
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 properly.
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 of all, I believe that
people
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 are living
the
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 most sufficient period of human race history. So
people
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 could not realise the fact that how important it is and how many
people
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 suffered due to the lack of
food
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 in the
apst
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past
.
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, when
people
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 threw away
their
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 rest of
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food
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their food
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, they cannot even see where it is going and how much it is. If they could see how much
food
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 is thrown away, I’m sure they would not spend
food
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 like
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.
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, I would like to talk about the solutions to solve
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 phenomenon.
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 and foremost, governments have to complement new policies about
regulation
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 of the
amount
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 of
wasting
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food
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 which is adapted to every
houses
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. To control all of the
people
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, each
countries
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 government should regulate them and I believe that
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 is the
most fair
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 way.
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, warning
commercial
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 or advertisements would be the way. If some advertisements keep warning
people
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 to care about the
amount
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 of
wasting
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wasted
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food
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,
people
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 can get alertness constantly. In conclusion,
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people
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 do not care about the
amount
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 of
food
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 they threw away. I believe that
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 trend can be solved
by
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in
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 some ways.
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, we should keep focusing on
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 trend and
do
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not ignore
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 problem.
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