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Fast food industry is having negative effect on our health. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is a fact that in recent times the fast
food
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industry
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 is facing rapid growth.
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this
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 has positive effects in some areas, like the economy, it is obvious that it damages human
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. People tend to prefer fast
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 because it is more affordable and easy to get but it is less nutritious and harmful for them.
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, I personally think that the
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 creating
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food
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 can be considered dangerous for our well-being.
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 with, fast
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 has taken over people's everyday meal schedules because of the intense lifestyle
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 lives, especially in urban areas. More specifically, the crowd do not have any extra time to cook a proper and healthy meal and
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 prefers the option of a quick but unhealthy one. In the long run, that preference leads to obesity and sometimes to related diseases like heart attacks. Not surprisingly, there is a correlation between countries that have adopted
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 eating habits in their culture and the
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 problems we mentioned above for their population. Constant advertising of fast
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 has
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 a negative effect on young children's
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. The latter
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 is creating a trend around fast
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 and targets kids who have little self-control and do not realise that the meals they choose are strongly linked to their
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 status while growing up.
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 is another harmful consequence
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 not to be overlooked as the results of
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 campaigns can already be seen in western countries where the obesity rates are off the charts. To sum up, the fast
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industry
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 is a profound threat to people's
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 as we can see that its growth is associated with many overeating-related problems.
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, the advertising campaigns of
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 businesses are
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 a big and not commonly discussed problem that will strongly affect the well-being of future adults. For all of those reasons, I believe the fast
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industry
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 can be considered a
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 hazard for us and measures should be taken to counter its expansion of it.
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