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Subjects like arts, music and drama are more important than other subjects and therefore should be given more time in the calendar. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that the
arts
,
music
 and
drama
 are more important than the other
subjects
. Some
students
 flourish when studying
music
, art or
drama
 but
maths
 and
science
 are
also
subjects
 that are essential in life. I strongly disagree with the fact that
arts
,
music
 and are more important than other
subjects
. I agree with the fact that not everyone has a talent for mathematics, physics or languages and many
students
 only do their best work when they can be creative. Many
students
 simply cannot focus on traditional
subjects
such
 as
maths
,
science
 or history unless they are expressing themselves creatively through painting, song or dance. Some people would disagree with
this
 view and say that art stops young children from spending enough time on the more important
subjects
 and passing major exams. All the
subjects
 have equal importance, and all the
subjects
 like
music
,
arts
 and
drama
 should have equal weightage as
maths
,
science
 and history. No field of interest should be considered more important than the other. As all
students
 are different and have different fields of interest, it should be left to the
students
 to pursue their field of interest whether it is
maths
,
science
 or
arts
, or
drama
. Some
students
 love
maths
 and physics and pursue a career in engineering, some love
science
 and biology to pursue a career in the medical field,
likewise
 some love
music
, dance, or
drama
 and tend to pursue a career as a singer, musician, dancer, or actor. In conclusion, all the
subjects
 have equal importance and I completely disagree with the opinion that art,
music
 and
drama
 are more important than other
subjects
.
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