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Some people think that it is beneficial for students to go to private secondary schools, but others think that it has negative effects. Discuss both points of view and give your own oipnion

#people #students #schools #effects #points #oipnion
Individuals think that going to private secondary
school
 brings many advantages to
students
.
However
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 some
thinks
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 it has negative outcomes. In my opinion, private secondary
schools
 are better options than
the
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apply
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public ones. According to some
people
,
students
 should go to private
schools
. Generally, the level of
education
 in those
schools
are
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is
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 higher than
the
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in the
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 others. Most of the time, private
schools
 hire the best teachers to educate
students
. Those teachers
also
 have
high
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a high
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salary
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salaries
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.
That is
 why they are
more keen
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on
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apply
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to work
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 with
students
 and try to share all of their knowledge. According to statistics, majority of the secondary
school
 graduates have better job options and high incomes. In a nutshell,
students
 from private
schools
 have more
chance
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chances
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 to live in better conditions in the future. On the other side, private
education
centers
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centres
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 are expensive.
People
 from poor families rarely have a chance to study there except
some
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for some
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 distinguishable
students
 who get a scholarship from various organizations. Because of that, many intelligent and diligent
students
 do not get a chance to study there. I know many
people
 from my experience that their child was very clever, but because of their financial limitations, their kid did not get a proper
education
. To sum up,
people
 should carefully consider private
school
 costs before applying. In conclusion, some
people
believes
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 that private
school
 is
a
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the
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 key to the best
education
 but some
thinks
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think
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otherwise
. In my opinion, I agree that private
schools
 are costly but
it
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they
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 can be affordable for families which
give
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gives
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a
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apply
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value to
significance
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the significance
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 of
education
.
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