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Some individuals argue people should buy only local products rather than foreign products. do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays
its
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it's
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 really easy you can purchase anything all around the
world
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 with the help
to
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of
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 technology and
internet
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the internet
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. While some
people
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 claim that we should prefer the domestic market
instead
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 of overseas. Whereas
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 essay is advocating the former point of view in the following paragraph. On the one hand ,so many dwellers believe that
national
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the national
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 community should buy
the
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all
products
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 from their nation because they are cheap and affordable
instead
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 of international
products
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.
For example
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, dragon
fruit
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 is international
fruit
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 which is not cultivated in Canada and
price
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 of that
fruit
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high
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as
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compared with
another
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other
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 market
fruit
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. Another reason is they think the value of domestic items will be declined by overseas
products
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people
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gives
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 more preference to
the
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outsider
products
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for instance
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 clothes
people
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 like to buy different brands from different
countries
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 to show their status in society. On
the
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another
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other
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 hand ,while some
nation
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are
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 not in
favor
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 of import ,essay
believe
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its
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 a good way to maintain healthy relationships between the
countries
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 by
import
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importing
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 and
export
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exporting
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 their local stuff on the international level.
such
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 as Quatro is one of the
country
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countries
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 who is export their fuel all around the
world
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 to run the automobile vehicles those working on fossil
fule
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fuel
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.
Secondly
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 like
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this
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 we can maintain balance all around the
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 because we have so many
countries
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 around the
world
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those
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that
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 are not agriculture friendly
such
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 as
canada
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Canada
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 which is not producing all eating item's inside the country due to weather conditions
large
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a large
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 amount of stuff is imported inside
the
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Canada from all around the
world
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.
Last
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 but not least economic development sending the local
products
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on
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the
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good wages outside the
countries
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help
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helps
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 to support their economic status as
such
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india
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India
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 is imported food stuff dramatically to
the
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other
countries
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 which
help
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 to build the economy of the country. In conclusion,
this
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 essay highlights that some
people
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thinking
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 it has
negative
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a negative
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 impact, while most of
population
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the population
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 believes
this
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 is a really useful method for particular
countries
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 to maintain their social and economic status around the
world
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.
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