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You have been doing some voluntary work to help your local community. However, now you are unable to continue doing this work. Write a letter to the manager of the organization where you have been working. In your letter: - Describe the work you have been doing - Explain why you can no longer do this work - Recommend another person who is interested in the work.

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Dear Manager, I am writing
this
 letter very sadly
due to
 cutting off my services with your organization. I will not be available anymore to help my local dwellers through your community events. I worked in the healthcare care department I served physically disabled people. My role and responsibilities are to provide medicine to old people on time and help them in exercising. As you already know I have applied for a Canada study visa for my higher studies. Fortunately, my visa is approved and now I have to go for overseas education. Owing to
this
, I will not be able to work there in the future. But I have some recommendations for you, my friend recently passed BSc. Nursing and he is an expert in physiotherapy. He will not only take care of senior patients but
also
 help them in recovering at a fast pace. I hope you understand my concern and provide me with an experience certificate. Looking forward to your guidance for the termination process. Yours faithfully, Navdeep Kaur
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task achievement
Ensure that each paragraph clearly covers a separate key point as per task instructions. The letter covers the required points but could benefit from greater detail regarding your voluntary work.
coherence cohesion
Maintain a logical structure throughout the letter and use paragraphs effectively to differentiate your points. The letter was well-structured, with appropriate use of paragraphs.
task achievement
Use varied sentence structures and vocabulary to convey your message for a more sophisticated tone. While the writing tone is suitable, there's potential for a richer vocabulary.
coherence cohesion
Include an appropriate greeting and closing. Your letter had suitable greetings and closings.
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