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Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

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These days, the amount of brutality in publishing is growing. While some
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 argue that
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 trend will undoubtedly lead humans to a dangerous future, others claim that it has no damaging effect on society. I believe that in most cases
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violence
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 doesn't affect
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's behaviour.
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, I think that
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 act on their motives, regardless of what they see on
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 to say, if someone intends to do harm to somebody,
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 not because of watching TV or playing computer games
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 but due to that person's character and education.
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 it is generally considered that violent
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 accustoms viewers to cruelty, I doubt
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 opinion. In my view, reasonable and intelligent
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 treat others humanely irrespective of what they see or hear in fictional stories.
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, video games and
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 may even reduce social
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 by providing a safe outlet for aggressiveness.
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, truculent
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 may fight in virtual reality
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 of evincing their combative spirit in the real world.
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 reduce the level of social
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 long-term perspective.
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, despite many claims and assumptions about the negative effects of
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 and computer ,games I have never seen any proven connection between violent
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 and illegal activities in social life. Taking everything into consideration, I would say that
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 in contemporary
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 has no substantial influence on
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's behaviour.
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 and computers are not the main factors that shape personal character, and they can even be useful in reducing the level of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pivotal
  • desensitize
  • catalyst
  • predisposed
  • harmless outlet
  • distinguish
  • controlled environments
  • empirical research
  • minimal or no direct correlation
  • socio-economic status
  • predisposition
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