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Some people believe that technology has made man more social. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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There is an opinion that
technology
 has helped
public
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 to become more social. I believe that for certain types of
people
technology
 undoubtedly has opened new ways of socialization. But
also
 we have become dependent on modern
technology
, losing real-life connections.
Technology
 has made us closer to each other nowadays.
People
 are all available by phone. Men are using mobile messengers on a daily basis, chatting with other
people
. It is incredible how you can be in touch with someone on the other side of the planet due to
technology
. There are different social media and platforms on the Internet, everybody can choose the
people
 they want to talk to. A lot of
people
 make
friends
 online,
for example
 through video games. The diversity of the ways of socialization modern
technology
 is offering, is helping
people
 to have more
friends
 than previous generations.
On the other hand
, real-life connections started to devalue. It can be seen how a group of
friends
 glance at their
phones
 while they are spending time together. Almost everyone in the subway stares at their gadgets. Even couples go to bed with
phones
 in their hands.
Technology
 and smartphones
in particular
 are disrupting society, making us feel alone – interacting with our gadgets and not with each other. There is no need to keep real-life connections with
friends
 because social media has created an illusion that everybody is close. Sometimes it could lead to addiction to
phones
. To sum up,
technology
 is offering amazing ways for
people
 to become close together and has a huge influence on our lives.
Thus
, for a lot of ,
people
 it is difficult to stop watching their
phones
 and start to live a real life. It is very crucial for everybody to have a balance between virtual and real life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social interaction
  • connect
  • communicate
  • video conferencing
  • stay in touch
  • online communities
  • forums
  • like-minded individuals
  • global communication
  • collaboration
  • access to information
  • knowledge
  • bridge the gap
  • social isolation
  • detachment
  • face-to-face communication
  • genuine human connection
  • maintain
  • real-life interactions
  • balance
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