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Today’s teenagers struggle with many social issues. Some people think that is because their parents are spending more time at work than at home. Do you agree or disagree?

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Mental
health
 is an underrated issue in people's life, normally
this
 issue is not taken into consideration but is as important as any other personal problem. Nowadays, with the exponential
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 of social media applications and
the
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 use of
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, the need for social skills has
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underdevelop
 among
teenegers
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teenagers
,
thus
, more teenagers struggle with social issues, affecting their mental
health
 which might lead to possible traumas.
Therefore
 it is argued that social
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issues
 in teenagers might be an effect of absent parents while other say it does not have a correlation.
Certainly
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 the
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absent
absence
 of a parent plays an important role in the mental
health
 of a kid,
this
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undoubtedly
 helps to develop social
isuues
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issues
,
moreover
, can even develop more problems
to
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 a kid's
health
.
For Example
, a child whose parents find the time to be with him/her will encounter far more
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beneficial
 outcomes out of their relationship whereas a child whose parents are away for most of the day will see himself/herself in a
diificult
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difficult
 situation,
this
 can develop issues like isolation, increasing the chances to develop social issues.
Nevertheless
, whether a parent accompanied a child or not is not the only factor to take into consideration, there are other factors
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,
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 the impact of social media, which a
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plays
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 a way bigger role in the mental
health
 of a person. To sum up,
although
 the impact of an absent parent
definetely
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definitely
 has a great
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repercussion
repercussions
in
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 the mental
health
 of
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, more factors need to be into consideration. Even so, the more time you can spend with your kids the more
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beneficial
 will be for both.
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