Today more and more people are using mobile phones and computers. Thus, people are losing the ability to communicate face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Someone
Correct your spelling
Some
believes
that Correct subject-verb agreement
believe
people
are losing the ability to communicate face to face since they are using mobile phones
and computers more than the in past. I would argue that I disagree with this
statement, and my opinions will be discussed for the following reasons.
Nowadays, there are more methods of communication available, especially mobile phones
and computers. Although
individuals utilize more these new technologies, they are still can see each other while
talking. Similarly
, talking to each other in person, people
can see faces while
speaking to their families or friends by using cell phones
. For instance
, they can video call or FaceTime. Furthermore
they can use applications Add a comma
Furthermore,
such
as Zoom, Microsoft Teams and Skype to call whomever they desire to see faces and talk to. Therefore
, I disagree that people
can communicate face-to-face less when they use either their mobile phones
or computers.
In addition
, unlike in the past, individuals are currently able to get closer without waiting for a long time to receive letters from their families, relatives, friends or customers. These days people
not only interface faster, but they can also
get closer since they manipulate either smart gadgets or laptops. Hence
new technologies provide more conveniences for long-distance communication. As a result
of the availability of these types of devices, all of population
can connect and see faces even though they live far away from each other. Add an article
the population
Consequently
, I do believe that people
still can reach out better with these
type of hi-tech equipment.
In conclusion, new technologies, e.g. iPhone, iPad or MacBook, Correct determiner usage
this
are not only be
alternatives for individuals to contact Change the verb form
are not only
to
each other, but they Change preposition
apply
additionally
help communities to connect better. With helping
of these devices, Wrong verb form
the help
people
can see and keep in touch each
other Change preposition
with each
easier
. Correct word choice
more easily
Moreover
they can have many options to connect to anyone regardless of how far they stay from each other. Add a comma
Moreover,
Thus
, I disagree that people
are losing the ability to communicate face-to-face by using highly technological appliances, but actually
they have more abilities to connect and see each other because of using these devices.Add a comma
actually,
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